Showing posts with label English writing corrected. Show all posts
Showing posts with label English writing corrected. Show all posts

May 22, 2012

Endangered species - Corrected version


Everyday, animals are becoming extinct throughout the world. What do you think the causes of this are? What solutions can you suggest?

            Nowadays, there are many wild animals are under threat of extinction. Although occasionally some species disappear from the Earth naturally, the causes of this phenomenon are mainly human activities. Humans, the smartest species in the world, must take responsibility for this loss.
            The most important reason is widespread deforestation. People cut down trees haphazardly, especially in developing countries. As we know, the number of species living in forests is much more than in any other habitats. Unfortunately, almost all forests are belonged to poor and developing countries such as countries in South America, South Asia and Africa. These countries consider forests as one of the most important natural resources. They cut down trees to export timber to rich countries and import basic goods such as food, drugs… Because it is very difficult for these countries to escape from the cycle of poverty, they still continue deforesting as a way to earn their living.
            The other reason is the rising of the world population. It leads to many problems. Firstly, people need more space to live or to build their houses, so they invade habitats of wildlife species. Secondly, in order to supply enough food to seven billion people, they must exhaustively exploit the nature. They hunt terrestrial animals on lands, catch fishes in the seas and trap birds. They do all possible manners to satisfy human needs without worrying about the stress of nature. There are many animal species become extinct and endangered because of illegal hunting activities.
            The development of industry is also a main reason; it connects with the rising of the world population. The more they develop industry, the more natural resources they need to operate and the more waste they discharge into the environment. Therefore, many species, also comprising human, are suffered from toxic substances; thus, the number of individuals of certain species has  been decreasing to levels of extinction. Industry also discharges carbon dioxide and other gases into the air. People believe that these gases cause two serious environmental problems called green house and climate change. These phenomena are leading to a great change of natural environment in the world. On one aspect, the temperature is gradually increasing; it makes ice on mountains and poles melt, thus the sea levels also are rising. Some coastal areas will be flooded under seawater, so species in these areas will loss their habitats and become fewer.
            What can we do to protect wildlife animals? Firstly, I think rich countries should help poor countries create some nature reserves and develop their own economies. Countries having nature reserves can develop the tourism industry. If the lives of the poor become better, they will not need to deforest and hunt animals in order to earn their living. Secondly, governments should improve knowledge of people about this problem through education and mass media. Thirdly, we need to use natural resources more wisely and stop poaching.   

May 3, 2012

Twenty thousand leagues under the sea_corrected version

If you ask me what was the story I liked most when I was still a boy, I will answer without a doubt that it was Twenty thousand leagues under the sea, a novel of the French novelist Jules Verne. It is one of the most inspired novels of all time.
            My father bought it for me when I was 9 or 10 years old. It was a beautiful period of time, because every weekend, my father bought me a book to encourage my reading hobby. I was very happy about this. I remember that the novel was published in three parts, each of them had a blue cover with a drawing on it. On the first part, the drawing was a large ship with a man standing on the bow and looking ahead via a monocular. On the second one, it was something like an electronic screen displaying a mysterious submarine. On the last part, it was a couple of man and woman curiously looking to the sea. I felt that, to me, the last drawing was very hard to understand. I didn’t know who were in that picture.
            The story was about a mysterious ship which was able to dive under the sea, a submarine, as we called it later. But in the time of the story, submarine did not exist, so nobody could explain about the appearance of something which was as large as a whale and by far the most powerful and speedy known creatures and machines all over the world. Some people guessed that it was a sea monster, but others asserted that it was a human made submarine. Sometime that mysterious thing caused accidents to other ships running on the sea surface, it made people and governments feel anxious and angry, so they decided to hunt that dangerous monster at all cost. And the extraordinary adventure began…
            Needless to say, it is the most attractive adventure I have ever known. Everything was described very beautiful. There are four main characters in the story. Three of them participated in hunting the unknown thing on the warship called Lincoln. They were the French biology professor Pierre Aronnax, his faithful assistant Conseil and the Canadian harpoonist Ned Land. The remaining character was Captain Nemo. I did not know where was he came from, I just knew that he was very rich – “I could repay the ten billion debt of French government very easily”, said he. And he did not like people, he made the submarine to keep away from people and ordinary life. This impressed me so much. The adventure led me through many wonderful places, they landed on some isolated or historic islands, they saw some unusual phenomena and rare creatures in the deep blue sea, such as undersea volcanoes, giant poulpes, pearls as large as coconut fruits… They went around the world by that submarine and never landed on the mainland. They even reached to the center of South Pole, no one before them could do that. And they were trapped by ice for some days, it was a very dangerous situation, but because of their courage and cleverness, they escaped from this situation and continued adventuring.
            But it was a sad story. At the end of the adventure, the submarine encountered an accident, it went into a deathly water whirl. Three people, the professor Aronnax, Conseil and Net escaped from this accident, while Capitan Nemo and other people on this submarine voluntarily died with their underwater house although they had enough time to escape…
            As I stated above, Twenty thousand leagues under the sea  is one of the most inspired story of all time. Many generations have read it, and people will still like it in the future. People have found the love of nature in this story, and it encourages all of them to think about lofty and beautiful ideas…